Thanks guys for pointing out I submitted to wrong form! The poem I initially provided is closer to a Villanelle rather than a Villonnet. So, I corrected it into the proper Villonnet form, which includes the structure of 15 lines (3 quatrains followed by a tercet), proper rhyme schemes, and the line repetitions.
Beneath the sky, I search for what is gone,
The answers lost in time’s elusive haze.
A moment passed, now memory withdrawn,
And I remain to trace these quiet days.
The stars above reflect what once was mine,
They shine, though none can offer me a clue.
Beneath the sky, I search for what is gone,
The answers lost in time’s elusive haze.
I chase the echoes, running out of time,
Each whisper faint, a shadow slipping through.
And still, I feel the pull of what is gone—
A moment passed, now memory withdrawn.
Beneath the sky, I search for what is gone,
And I remain to trace these quiet days.
This version now adheres more to the Villonnet form, with the correct repetition of lines 1, 4, 8, 12, 13, and 15, as well as the appropriate rhyme scheme and quatrain/tercet structure.
In silence, thoughts like shadows start to creep,
The quiet hum of days now far behind,
A restless soul still searching in the deep.
Where are the dreams I swore I’d always keep?
They fluttered off like whispers on the wind,
In silence, thoughts like shadows start to creep.
I wear the weight of promises, too steep,
Of words unsaid and paths I couldn’t find,
A restless soul still searching in the deep.
Time spins its thread, a tapestry I weep,
Each tangled knot the echoes of my mind,
In silence, thoughts like shadows start to creep.
Yet something stirs, a hope that dares to leap—
Perhaps not lost, just simply left behind.
A restless soul still searching in the deep,
As silence, thoughts, and shadows slowly seep.
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